What you said you need help with...

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What you say you need

·      2-well-formed sentences

·      3—not filling in/what I mean/clear

·      3—punctuation

·      2—organization

·      2—fragments, comma splices

·      grab attention

·      long sentences

·      staying focused

·      spelling/grammar

·      flow

·      conclusions

·      let creativity flow

·      expressing thoughts on paper

What I need—you to talk—when did you learn to not speak up? (Today's writing pactice).